Kivlov wrote:
Thanks! I've fixed all of the above.
Waiting for more...
I'll continue then!
I'll work my way through systematically- starting on the homepage (
citycardriving.com/)
Original text: We also design computer car driving games,
Correction: We also design
car driving computer games,
It's a computer game, yes, "computer car driving" just seems odd, "computer game" should be together.
Original text: help users feel the car driving in а big city or in a country in different conditions
Correction: help users
experience car driving in а big city,
the countryside and in different conditions
It was difficult to edit it incorporating "feel" as it was followed by a list-a list that needs commas, not "and"! "Country" could refer to a whole country, rather than rural areas (the countryside)
Original: Special stress in the "City Car Driving" simulator has been laid on variety of road situations
Correction: Special stress in the "City Car Driving" simulator has been laid on
a variety of
different road situations
Same as before-two missed connectives.
Original: You can read about origin and history
Correction: You can read about
the origin and history
Very basic mistake!
Original: If you wush to use
Correction: If you
wish to use
Why should I get a commercial license if you can't spell, or double check your website? That's what some people might think-I know English isn't your first language excusing any mistakes), but others might not realize this.
Original: New right-handed player cars immerse the player in completely different unusual driving conditions.
Correction: New
right-hand drive player cars immerse the player in completely
different driving conditions.
Not really a problem (The bold text still is), but is it a driving condition? Should this even be a point? The RHD cars are there because of the new Left-hand traffic.
It is not right-handed; it's right hand drive. You have right-handed scissors, not cars. "unusual" (ironically) sounds unusual, I don't think its necessary to get the point across.
Original: This game mode is faster and consumes less memory.
Correction:
The game is faster and consumes less memory.
The entire game is faster and consumes less memory, not a single game mode!
Original: One large and indivisible virtual world.
Correction: One large,
seamless virtual world.
Not an issue, its just that the game industry usually uses "seamless" to describe a game world with no loading screens.
Original: All cars get visible damage, when collide.
Correction: All cars get visible damage, when
they collide.
Again, a simple mistake.
Original: they're able to collide with player's car or with each other.
Correction: they're able to collide with
the player's car or with each other.
Another missing connective.
Original: with different difficulty level;
Correction: with different difficulty level
.
Must be a typo, Everything else in the list has a full stop.
Original: Instructor will give you advices in time of driving.
Correction:
The Instructor will give you
advice whilst of driving.
Another missing "the". "Advices" isn't a word. "whilst" basically means "in time of"
Original: Road becomes wet and greasy after rain.
This one isn't an issue. The problem is that the rain doesn't make the road "greasy". It makes its slippery, slick, shiny, reflective, etc. I', not sure if you are referring to less grip on a wet road, or the fact a wet road has reflections and looks nice. I'll let you decide that.
Original: The most modern racing wheels support.
Correction:
Supports the most modern racing wheels.
Because of "most modern" support must go at the front. Without the description "Racing wheel support" would be fine.
Original: completely supports feedback, 900-degree wheel rotation, clutch pedal and all other functions of the most modern and sophisticated wheels "Logitech G25/G27" and suchlike.
Correction: completely supports
force feedback, 900-degree wheel rotation, clutch pedal and all other functions of the most modern and sophisticated wheels
such as the "Logitech G25/G27" and suchlike.
I assume you mean force feedback-what other feedback would the wheel give? "such as the" is a connective- there needs to be something between the point and the example.
That's that page done; I'll do more if you want.
People can feel free to amend my suggestion if something else would be better to use.